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Salvador salvation information sheet (VILLIAN) the hood application


Code Name (Your ideal code name): Salvador Salvation

In-Game Code Name (if different from above): Salvador salvation

Alternate Moniker, i.e. The Man of Steel, World's Greatest Detective (not required):

Secret Identity: Salvador ‘Savior’ Sol

Aliases/Nicknames: booze the clown, salamander, Salvador salvation

Character Development (RP) Information:

Age: 22

Place of Birth: Gotham

Height: 6’2

Weight: 95 KG (210 lbs)

Hair Color: brown

Eye Color: brown

Physical Build: Extremely athletic

Race/Ethnicity/Nationality: caucasian

Physical Disability/Illnesses: ADD, ADHD, minor insanity

Personality (ie. Psychotic, Sadistic, Schemer, etc): Bi-polar, alcoholic depressed or full of life, his emotions are all consuming just like the fire of the sun. He is known to be a pyromaniac when given the chance to make something spark.

Likes: Alchohal, anything that can melt burn or combust in spontaneous flame.

Dislikes: Water, anything that could diminish fire, his own nightmares.

Skills: Painting, drawing, photography.

Powers (RP): he has the ability to control all forms of fire, so long as the sun exists and he is bathing in the flames of the solar lights he will have the equivalent of that of a mere spark, or a super nova.

Weakness(es): Water, plasma, magic, nightmares

Paraphernalia (Equipment, Weapons, etc.): he cannot afford such luxury

Game & Contact Information:

In-Game Powersets (Power/Weapon/Travel, etc.): Fire, hand blasts, FLIGHT
Preferred Role (Healer, Tank, Controller, DPS): DPS
Sponsor (Current Member offering):
Contact Email: [email protected]
Resident Time Zone: west coast
Hero Image URL (not required, but a plus!):

On a scale from 1-10, how invested in DC Universe Online are you?: 6 (I want to be more active however I must wait until summer is here, then I shall be online a lot more often)

On a scale from 1-10, how much do you enjoy DC Universe Online?: 10


League Questionnaire

The following questions are used to determine your interest in our League.


1. Why are you interested in becoming a part of The Hoods, and what do you feel The Hoods stand for?
Crime, family, a place where a super-villain, or henchman can go to when he needs a friend. that or a place where people don’t judge you for what you’ve done, in fact congratulate you on the scars you carry, and the skulls that dangle in your apartment at your feet.

2. How will you personally contribute to the betterment of our organization?
I don’t have a clue? I’m open to suggestion.

3. Did you read our "About Us" and "Home Base" Information Pages? (If not, please do so.)
…on it



Character Questionnaire

The following questions will give us a better understanding of how you view your character and help us to determine if he/she will be a good addition to our team.


1. In your opinion, what makes your character Original and Iconic, what makes them stand out amongst his/her fellow villains?
nothing really, i haven't got a clue on how to say a thing about him.

2. How dedicated are you to this character and his/her concept? Will he/she be your main character?
Very much so (the old explanation was a bit too psychotic)

3. Why did your character decide to become a villain?
The moment when he murdered his adoptive father to go down the path of a criminal in Gotham just to get by.



Character Bio

In 1000 words or less, please provide a concise bio about your character. This bio should include the origin of your character detailing how he acquired his/her abilities, his/her rise to fame in the villain community, and if applicable his/her introduction to The Hoods.

Note: Origins should contain little to no reference to any particular Superhero MMORPG established fiction (though exobyte-granted powers are obviously an exception). We are looking for 'your' ultimate version of your villain, not one that is tied directly to any existing game or comic-brand lore.

Born in a mid class adoptive family, an adoptive mother and father, he grew into his teen years up until his mothers death. No service was held for his mother who loved dear Salvador so. His father only cremated her and spit in her ashes afterwards. Afterwards Sal had become angrier himself, thinking it was his fault, developing mental issues and problems.

However upon his mother’s death his father went on a drunken rage, abusing and bruising the poor teen, not loved as much anymore, by anyone. Missing out on the events that would have been called ‘holidays’, Sal grew up hating Christmas, his birth day, Halloween, thanksgiving, anything. On Christmas eve for 3 years straight he was arrested for arson in three different buildings and houses, being a minor he was brought home to his father for even more abuse. Until, he snapped.

Salvador’s pyromania manifested as he burnt the house down with his father in it. Accepting the fate that would come to him, for 3 years from the age of twelve he hardened and adapted himself to the crime life of Gotham, joining flash robbing just to get by, until he was offered the chance to learn to fend for himself, and live without the need for the law, A crime organization picked him up off the streets.

Being trained, killing for money, He became a self dependant hit-man for hire.

When his powers manifested during the crisis with braniac’s exobites he gained the ability to conjure fire absorbing the rays of the sun, So long as the sun existed he would be a super-powered freak. Finally his pyromania had gotten the best of him, and he decided to incinerate every crime lord he was in touch with to date.

Because of the events past, he now is working as a super-villain/henchman underneath the greatest evil minds there was.

Roleplaying Essay

As The Hoods are primarily a Roleplay-centric group, we would like to ensure that anyone who may eventually join the League are capable of some form of RPing. In 500 words or less, please use the following scenario to write a short paragraph or two. This section should feature your character in the role of a villain. Please write in third-person only.

At the heart of Gotham's East End, Weather Wiccan hovers triumphantly at the center of a freak storm of her creation, as your fellow villains lay unconscious at her feet. You are the only still-standing member of your crew. Your misbegotten loot is nearby, but a crowd has gathered cautiously in the streets, both terrified and excited by the melee. Without a second thought you spring into action. (Please continue the story from this moment on.)

As Salvador stood there, shaking violently, head twisting and turning as his body lit up in flames, his clown mask had burnt off revealing the horror in his eyes as his flesh burst into flames, not consuming his body, just coating it with fire, he began to lash out as the aura of fire began to scorch anything and anyone around him. Turning his fellow villains into ashes, the scorching of the ground under his feet as he was lifted into the air as the cosmic rays poured into his head, and were unleashed through his vessel, the clothing he wore was turned to dust as well as his entire body was now wearing fire. Launching himself towards the witch.

Without hesitation the witch launched an oversized rock at Salvador as his eyes burnt with fury, hardly missing Sal, easily burning up as it entered his ‘gravitational pull’ turning to nothing, right before forming the mineral’s back within his hands as molten rock it was launched to the weather wiccan with the force of that of a comet.

When it reached the wiccan, she subtly dodged it only grazing one of her stems (leg), that appeared to be enough of a distraction for Salvador to regain focus and teleport out of there with his loot.


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Re: Salvador salvation information sheet (VILLIAN) the hood application (WIP)


I am not really sure where to begin honestly...

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Powers (RP): he has the ability to control all forms of fire, it is thought that if anyone was to end his life the sun would expload as a mental safe switch, that or you know so long as the sun exists he will live.



Controlling all forms of fire: Alright.

The rest: What the hell?

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2. How dedicated are you to this character and his/her concept? Will he/she be your main character?
Fifty bucks says Salvador can get a party going by noon full of clowns and hats with Amazonian girls in rabbit costumes including Alcohol from left to right. (._. yes, just….. to put it into words is just too much, Salvador salvation shall be the one and only)



...I'm going to take that as a "Very dedicated" and "Yes"...

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Growing up in a little part of Gotham called the slums, a crime engulfed town. He was parented by abusive farts of human beings named terry, and scab. Putting him through a ring of violent thugs and criminals to teach him ways to get money, do you know how often you see a 3 year old dealing coke? Not every day eh. Well Salvador was the 3 year old.
By the time he had turned 18 he had already killed 16 people under contract of crime lords of gotham, murdering them viciously. (._. don’t rush me theres a lot more to come, in fact im going to base a lot of the bio off of what happens in the game or in the forums, such as who he teams up with and what not.)



Considering the application is not timed there really is no way someone could conceivably "rush" you. Also, this is his background. It's suppose to reflect what your character has already gone through, not chronicle the current and upcoming events of his life.

I really hope to see this application cleaned up a lot soon or I am going to have to advise against allowing your character to join.

The core of the character seems alright, but the application is very sloppy and sounds like someone doing a really bad homage to the Joker. He seems to be a grab bag of "crazy" and that's not really something that is going to appeal to an organization that is actually about getting things done.

If you are intent on making a barely functional Joker homage you might want to look into the Funhouse Felons league. It might be a better fit for that type of character.

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Re: Salvador salvation information sheet (VILLIAN) the hood application (WIP)


Inclined to agree with Jack Eisbrecher. It also always confuses me when people post up an application as a WIP, that just seems silly, you could just as well finish it and post it when it's done. This simply sounds like an excuse to alter whatever you entered later, after people commented on it.



Anyhow, because it's still a WIP I won't comment too much on the actual application. Although I must say it seems a bit too much of a comical relief thing, than an actual solid concept.

I did like the sun part, not the exploding nonsense, but how his powers are diminished in strength when he isn't bathing in sunlight. It has potential, but there's just so much ridicule clogging up the application it's hard to read between the lines or maybe hard not to.
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cleaned up (hopefully) Replaced and edited the original, it is no longer silly.

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Going back over your bio for Salvador this sort of sticks out as a glaring reason for The Hoods to be wary of allowing him to join from an in-character perspective:

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Finally his pyromania had gotten the best of him, and he decided to incinerate every crime lord he was in touch with to date.



Following the timeline provided in your bio Salvador was a hitman for hire for roughly seven years. With no specific number of crime lords mentioned I still get the impression that eventually someone burning crime lords to death would become a bit suspicious.

Looking over the fight with Weather Wiccan two things caught my attention:

quote:

Without hesitation the witch launched an oversized rock at Salvador as his eyes burnt with fury, hardly missing Sal, easily burning up as it entered his ‘gravitational pull’ turning to nothing, right before forming the mineral’s back within his hands as molten rock it was launched to the weather wiccan with the force of that of a comet.



Why and/or how does your character have a "gravitational pull"? Also, how do fire powers based on the sun allow him to create "molten rock" out of nothing?

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When it reached the wiccan, she subtly dodged it only grazing one of her stems (leg), that appeared to be enough of a distraction for Salvador to regain focus and teleport out of there with his loot.



Salvador can fly. Why and/or how does he teleport?

Lastly, two questions in the out-of-character portion seem a bit underwhelming:

quote:

2. How will you personally contribute to the betterment of our organization?
I don’t have a clue? I’m open to suggestion.



quote:

1. In your opinion, what makes your character Original and Iconic, what makes them stand out amongst his/her fellow villains?
nothing really, i haven't got a clue on how to say a thing about him.



Between these two answers the application and character seems pretty thrown together. Overall I can't really see this character being a good addition for The Hoods.

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-_- it appears to be too difficult to try and succeed with this type of thing. third try would have been futile.

First of all, he flies by a forcing his energy to the ground allowing him to rocket through the airs like a star in space. So long as he is in motion he will stay in motion until the force under him and behind him gives out. Physics my good sir.

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First of all, he flies by a forcing his energy to the ground allowing him to rocket through the airs like a star in space. So long as he is in motion he will stay in motion until the force under him and behind him gives out. Physics my good sir.



Please look over what I wrote again.

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When it reached the wiccan, she subtly dodged it only grazing one of her stems (leg), that appeared to be enough of a distraction for Salvador to regain focus and teleport out of there with his loot.




Salvador can fly. Why and/or how does he teleport?



My question was about your character teleporting.

That aside, sometimes characters just don't work for certain leagues. Your character seems more than a bit unstable. That's not exactly appealing to a crime organization that wants to be successful. That's also part of the reason I suggested you look into the Funhouse Felons.

I like the basic idea of your character. I really do. It is however a bit hard to overlook things like this:

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Turning his fellow villains into ashes, the scorching of the ground under his feet as he was lifted into the air as the cosmic rays poured into his head, and were unleashed through his vessel, the clothing he wore was turned to dust as well as his entire body was now wearing fire.



Your team mates are unconscious and in your second sentence you proceed to turn them into ashes.

This does not seem like someone who plays well with others to me. I don't like voting no on applications, I really don't. I would love to get a lot more villains into the league, but there are times when I can't honestly say that I think the character is a good fit.

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Give me a day or two good sir, it will be altered to the likings, i really do wish to join the hoods, its just a bit difficult to put a biography together.
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Give me a day or two good sir, it will be altered to the likings, i really do wish to join the hoods, its just a bit difficult to put a biography together.



That worries me, honestly. If you know who and what your character is, it should be simple. I get the feeling you really don't have a real handle on what you want to do with the character yet, or who he is.

Maybe spend a bit of time RPing him first, get to know him yourself, and then try again once you're more familiar with your own character.
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Very well. I will return when i have a clue what to do. Rp in the forums or what? I've got little idea where to go.
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